tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post152075519355767197..comments2024-01-03T23:18:26.327-05:00Comments on Celeste Jones: #SatSpanks I Need Your HelpUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-91571477090132576152013-10-03T01:14:21.243-04:002013-10-03T01:14:21.243-04:00I would pick B, since what he says next pretty wel...I would pick B, since what he says next pretty well explains it, if they haven't gotten it.Angela Sargentihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07320755652055850719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-79994410408461325722013-10-02T14:19:37.637-04:002013-10-02T14:19:37.637-04:00If I put on my "reader only" hat, person...If I put on my "reader only" hat, personally I wouldn't need the explanation parts at all, so I'd end it right after "war of words." The fun of it, to me, strictly in casual reader mode, is coming upon it, not expecting it (ruk ruk). I think readers who do get it, well, they get to feel smug, and readers who think it's a 'typo' or something, well ... um.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06172215466287222823noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-66793003238119878352013-10-02T12:58:01.410-04:002013-10-02T12:58:01.410-04:00I say A- I do love the clever line, plus her thoug...I say A- I do love the clever line, plus her thoughts on the line. great snippet.Joelle Casteelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06916035794147846651noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-4201884167842004072013-09-30T10:25:46.117-04:002013-09-30T10:25:46.117-04:00I love both lines, Celeste, and I think “Well, hel...I love both lines, Celeste, and I think “Well, hello Yankee girl, have you spit on anyone yet...” is the perfect set up for the pun. I love it!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-23994917968833288282013-09-29T19:32:26.635-04:002013-09-29T19:32:26.635-04:00Leave as is...
Very good word-smithing.Leave as is...<br />Very good word-smithing.houston_switchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16400627283520686262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-31868060001453827072013-09-29T19:30:47.440-04:002013-09-29T19:30:47.440-04:00Leave as is...
Very good word-smithing.Leave as is...<br />Very good word-smithing.houston_switchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16400627283520686262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-83646817360912313192013-09-29T14:48:31.862-04:002013-09-29T14:48:31.862-04:00Love the nipping. Leave it all--I don't think ...Love the nipping. Leave it all--I don't think you can trust your reader to follow you, otherwise.Emily Tiltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00536293416359753427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-77809358832138126192013-09-29T13:09:10.710-04:002013-09-29T13:09:10.710-04:00I'd say leave it all in. It's really very ...I'd say leave it all in. It's really very clever, but books these days have too many typos. If you don't leave something in there to point out that it's a jest, someone will (annoyingly) think that you can't spell. It's a shame, eh?Patricia Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05042411219884835267noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-38738899072993871512013-09-29T12:54:21.535-04:002013-09-29T12:54:21.535-04:00B - take out the explanation. You are so clever a...B - take out the explanation. You are so clever and we get it! loved it!Renee Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01414212384941364401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-8020266243155229382013-09-28T22:33:01.393-04:002013-09-28T22:33:01.393-04:00Haha, very punny. Made me laugh - and sing that so...Haha, very punny. Made me laugh - and sing that song from Beauty & The Beast: "I'm especially good at expectorating ..." ;-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-89411440661769036142013-09-28T20:27:51.602-04:002013-09-28T20:27:51.602-04:00I like it the way it is. She's a feisty one an...I like it the way it is. She's a feisty one and I can see many many spankings in her future:)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00415912513807382320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-70236485245231621562013-09-28T18:22:30.561-04:002013-09-28T18:22:30.561-04:00I agree with Natasha. Very funny and clever, but I...I agree with Natasha. Very funny and clever, but I don't think I want it pointed out to me. I think it's fine that it's not a word with a similar meaning.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-91521391888919784402013-09-28T16:34:17.514-04:002013-09-28T16:34:17.514-04:00I agree with Natasha to remove the "Have I st...I agree with Natasha to remove the "Have I stunned you with my wordplay" part. That sounds too self-congratulatory. I think it's best for her to keep wondering if she heard it right. <br /><br />They sound like interesting characters!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07018242805838962649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-84978181638834185552013-09-28T16:21:31.098-04:002013-09-28T16:21:31.098-04:00I like it as is. Nothing wrong with being clever.I like it as is. Nothing wrong with being clever.Kelli Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11699150495979430778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-19261168510472864652013-09-28T15:47:04.924-04:002013-09-28T15:47:04.924-04:00LOL, I liked it. But I would do something to itali...LOL, I liked it. But I would do something to italicize it. I couldn't figure it out until the next sentence.<br />Very funny!<br />I like humor and play on words like this.<br />Great job!!! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10795458102093113737noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-85594157319465698362013-09-28T14:46:10.113-04:002013-09-28T14:46:10.113-04:00I say leave it in but take out his 'have I stu...I say leave it in but take out his 'have I stunned you with my wordplay' bit. I love when clever little things work their way into writing. I do a little pat on the back and giggle - all by myself at my desk. It's what makes doing this nice. We're weird like that I think! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07220029273749305283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-84474961577894168502013-09-28T12:26:12.023-04:002013-09-28T12:26:12.023-04:00I didn't get it at first, but in the next para...I didn't get it at first, but in the next paragraph where she focuses on the word play, it really fits the conversation. Leave it all in :)Thttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02995447825109758826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-78285828390802920912013-09-28T12:06:08.084-04:002013-09-28T12:06:08.084-04:00I think it's fun little play. I would say lea...I think it's fun little play. I would say leave it, just trim out the part where you say, "because who could really be that clever". Otherwise it's well written and a fun character moment.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08698304192173009677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-1867141790123186892013-09-28T12:01:29.419-04:002013-09-28T12:01:29.419-04:00I think it's an adorable little play on the ch...I think it's an adorable little play on the character of both words.. Although expectorate does not exactly mean expect. But Sarah no less gets taken by his implication. It's an enticing, yet subtle tease. <br />I vote 'leave it.' is was cleaver... Nice Job! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10986881819085040884noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-2619455443127916592013-09-28T11:29:28.232-04:002013-09-28T11:29:28.232-04:00I think it shows the fun in their relationship, Th...I think it shows the fun in their relationship, The mocking teasing. ;)<br /><br />Maybe you are looking for different wording? I hate when I have something in my mind and a word sits on the tip of my tongue..perhaps if we knew more about them.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00307063812313049163noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-42173323816106113152013-09-28T10:46:45.554-04:002013-09-28T10:46:45.554-04:00Sounds like an interesting story with interesting ...Sounds like an interesting story with interesting characters! I think it's fine as is.Sue Lyndonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05420556675096411446noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-49674329440013214462013-09-28T10:37:55.794-04:002013-09-28T10:37:55.794-04:00Leave it as it is, would be my vote. I had no prob...Leave it as it is, would be my vote. I had no problem understanding it and thought it was a fun play on words.Maren Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05824545701046294239noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-75394338189003739592013-09-28T10:31:38.424-04:002013-09-28T10:31:38.424-04:00It sounds like the makings of a fun book though.It sounds like the makings of a fun book though.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05664433877029404270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-91079245554785324162013-09-28T10:30:30.870-04:002013-09-28T10:30:30.870-04:00Very much depends on the his character if it suits...Very much depends on the his character if it suits him.<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05664433877029404270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3164186761666324757.post-5429996932256750742013-09-28T08:25:49.078-04:002013-09-28T08:25:49.078-04:00I think it is a clever idea, but I would work in t...I think it is a clever idea, but I would work in the word another way. I think what is needed in this context is a pun, which has double meaning, but expectorate doesn't work because it doesn't mean "expect." It really comes down to how proper he is. His use of expectorate makes him seem more American than proper English lord. <br /><br />She is quite feisty. I find the spittingCara Bristolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13787980548582603649noreply@blogger.com